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Three days of rain had come to an end; Jeff Kuhn's boots squelched in the grass of a backyard on the north end. He paused a moment when the porch light sensed he and Talobor Pavlevic's movement. Talobor, who they called "Ludilo" behind his back, was an enormous man with a square head and a broad chest, the typical Bosnian track-suit wearing gangster. Jeff hated the nine-mil toting psychopath.

Clear sky, blinking aircraft lights motoring between the stars. It was a good night for a fire, like a family down the street. A good night to go to the trailer park and find a party, or maybe head to the bar with dad and patch things up. Instead he and Talobor were out to solve the mystery of who put two bullets in Andre's brain. And somehow he had to find evidence that pointed anywhere but at himself.

This was one of those nights he desperately wished for a regular job.

Talobor made a face that told Jeff to get moving, so he did. The way up and across the porch Kuhn thought angrily, eat shit. Forty-something years old and you're still tracking heroin, a biker gang's bitch. Just a fucking goon can't even speak English.

The second Jeff swung open the back door he transformed. He had to; when you wanted answers from somebody, you needed to become a monster. No sleazier than a car salesman, just a different emotional direction.

Everything seemed to light up in that moment. He charged across the landing and down the peeling yellow linoleum staircase and into the basement. Concrete floors, covered in dirty rugs. The smell of cigarettes and mildew. Two girls, one maybe eighteen and the other in her mid-twenties, sat on a fake leather sofa. In the cloth rocking chair on the other side of the room, in the corner facing the stairs, a little native guy, Damian, seventeen and holding a ziploc baggie of cocaine.

They all stared at Jeff Kuhn, in his leather jacket, jeans, and steel-toes, and Talobor, in his red-striped Nikes. Damian's face had gone white. The girls could sense something was very wrong, but they blushed.

"'Evening, Damian. How's tricks?" Jeff put on a friendly smile and slowed right down. He didn't have to yank the six-shooter tucked into the back of his pants. Not yet. Damian already looked about two seconds away from shitting his pants.

"Jeff..."

"Uh...can we just get our stuff and go?" The older woman asked. She was pretty enough, with the wild eyes and sudden movements of someone who'd snorted a few too many lines in her day. The younger one, a little chubbier with a mane of black hair, looked to be about thirty IQ points ahead of her older friend.

"Nah, this'll only take a minute." Jeff looked around for a seat and found one by the television. He dragged it into the middle of the rug and sat down. Talobor remained by the bottom of the stairs. "So, Damian. How's business?"

"It's...it's good man."

"Yeah? How good?"

"Just...y'know. Friday night...summertime..."

"I hear you found a way to make a lot more green than before."

Damian kept his mouth shut.

"No? Am I wrong?"

Nothing.

"Jeez. Sorry, Talobor, usually this guy's way better conversation. I'm sure he doesn't mean any disrespect."

"No...no disrespect." Damian looked back and forth between the two. The bone of his knuckles showed through, they were clutching the armrests so tightly.

"Hey, we don't want any part of this." The younger woman said.

"Any part of what? A friendly conversation? I just heard that Damian got himself a new product somehow. Thought I'd ask about it."

The girl wanted to leave. The older one had sunk into the couch.

"Damian, buddy. I heard you got some new product in. No? That doesn't jog your memory?"

"Listen, Jeff--"

"Nah, you listen. Andre ran all the H in this town. The only other motherfuckers who had any permission to do it are those shitskins way down on the south side. Andre gets popped in a playground one night, and suddenly you get caught with your own private supply."

"No, it's not like that!"

"You're one dumb motherfucker, you know that?" Jeff laughed. "Fucking take down a lifer, take his H, and start your own private enterprise. You thought we wouldn't hear about it?"

"I didn't--"

Jeff leaped out of his seat. He had his knee in Damian's crotch in a half-second, and he slapped the kid so hard across the side of his head Jeff thought he might pop an eye out. He backhanded him, went the other way, backhanded again, used his palm a last time. Damian's nose spilled out a phlegmy mixture of blood and snot, tears leaked from his eyes.

Kuhn reached behind and drew his pistol. He jammed it in Damian's temple. The younger girl shot to her feet and was shoved back into her seat by Talobor. The older one had forced herself so far into the couch her ass might have hit the wall.

"Who the fuck are you paying then?" Jeff roared, "Who sold you the fucking H!"

Damian whimpered and screamed and begged Jeff not to shoot.

"Answer the question! Who sold you the fucking H!"

"Domenico! Dom! Dom from Montreal!"

Jeff withdrew from the kid. He gently placed his shooter back in his pants. Damian's pants were wet with piss, his shirt was soaking up blood. The wailing sound he made almost convinced Jeff to just blow his brains out.

"All right, all right. Relax."

"I'm sorry!" Damian shrieked, "I'm sorry! He told me I could make fifteen grand off this stuff! What was I supposed to do? I thought he'd kill me if I didn't just for knowing about it!"

"Yeah, all right. Fine. Stop crying. Stop fucking crying!"

"Okay...okay..." The kid sobbed a little, half got a hold of himself.

"All right. Here's what's going down. You pay Lars now. Got it? Lars gets twenty-five percent. That dago comes back to you, you call me and you tell me where to find him."

"Okay...okay...I swear to god...okay..."

"Now the Board told me to tell you, you're off the hook. This time. You ever try to go around the organization again, and that's it. I'll come back here and I'll blow your fucking brains out. It'd be a shame, too, since if I did that I'd have to do the same for these two lovely ladies right here. You don't want anybody to get hurt, right?"

"Yeah...okay...right..." Damian's hyperventilating died away.

"We're gonna find Dom. You're gonna help us, if possible. Don't fuck up again, kid. You're lucky they told me to deal with you and not Talobor, that's all I'm gonna say."

Jeff looked the two girls up and down again. He wished he'd met them under different circumstances. Something about the older one told him the gang could use her. The younger one, hopefully, wouldn't follow her friend into any more coke deals.

"How much are you charging these girls for that bag?"

"Sixty...sixty-five..."

Jeff reached into his coat pocket, pulled four twenties from his cash clip, and handed it to Damian.

"You give them the change. You girls want the rarer stuff, the acid and the shrooms, you tell Damian and he'll get you in contact with some friends of mine. Have a good night."

Talobor drove them out of there, and asides from mentioning that they should have killed the kid once they got the information, he didn't say anything. That suited Jeff just fine. There was a strange feeling somewhere deep inside, something that wasn't quite dread, that didn't make it to regret. A heavy weight tugging on the bottom of his heart.

How much longer can we play this fucking game?
Interrogation
One thing I really love is when two separate stories I'm writing but can't seem to gain any traction on congeal. I won't go into too many details, but that happened with the Jeff Kuhn series. All's I'm gonna say is that outside the excerpts I'm posting on here there is some pretty hefty postmodernism going on. I think surrealism and crime fiction is a beautiful match. Again, though, the stuff that's going on here is just the crime narrative.

Also, "ludilo" is Srpski for "insanity." "Lud" just means crazy. Should the guy's nickname be Lud or Ludilo?

Oh, and here's the first Jeff Kuhn excerpt for those who haven't read it: Two AM, At A PlaygroundThe streets all slick with rain reminded him of a hazy digital painting, the lights in their puddles formed with exaggerated, unpolished brush strokes. A half-dozen men and women in front of the bar, all lit up by the big white light hanging over the bouncer, formed the only distinct part of the scene. He wished he knew how to paint the things he saw.
Standing beneath a playground, he looked miserable and out of place. The loaded revolver in his right hand looked more like a child's toy in this setting. What a place for a skid bar like that, he thought, just across the street from an elementary school. Tomorrow if all went as planned the kids who played on these swings and platforms would be stuck behind yellow tape, their vacation place home to grisly murder.
Murder as committed by Jeff Kuhn, a man who played the part of a lost high school graduate far better than that of a hitman.
Nearly ten to two. The greasy biker son of a bitch would be coming out any minute, dragged drunkenly alo
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Man I suck at this NaNoWriMo thing. Three days in and I've got nothing. A lot of really short, two-page stories or short stories with solid beginnings, but nothing I can fashion a good paperweight out of. By the time I figure something out that'll actually work I'll be playing half a month's worth of catchup in a day.

Read the last half of The Third Policeman by Flann O'Brien all in one go last Saturday night. Been a few months since I did that. It occurred to me that books are just old-school Netflix; you open it, lay down on the couch, and by the time you're done it's dawn and reality is a hazy mess you don't want to deal with. I missed getting that feeling from paper rather than TV. Anyway, I recommend the book. It gets a little tedious in a couple places but that is some damn fine postmodernist writing, on par with James Joyce.

They say you should act like a Roman when in Rome, but I disagree. I think you should act like a Vandal.
Go figure: I stop getting shitfaced every couple days and my productivity goes way up. Why, why can't I combine the two things I most enjoy? Oh, right, because the point of alcohol abuse is to dull oneself into a stupor.

Another publication by Dreamscape Press is forthcoming: I have a story in their anthology Zombies in Japan, which I'm told will be out sometime around the new year. It's unpaid, naturally, but I wrote the tale in fifteen minutes so what the hell do I care?

Recently I got myself a new job at a warehouse, picking orders from nine in the evening to five in the morning. While that may sound grueling, I've actually adapted my sleep schedule pretty handily and I'm enjoying it thoroughly. Soon I'll have enough cash to go out and buy cheap booze and overpriced books by Penguin again. Seriously, why does a single Philip K. Dick novel of less than two hundred pages cost just as much as one that's twice as long and a hundred times more well-known? I go to used book stores a lot, of course, but sometimes you just can't find what you're after in those places. Great locations to just shop around, though.

My writing life is pretty aimless as of late. I'm compiling my own anthology, with plans to put it on Amazon, out of stories that have either appeared on here or that I couldn't get published professionally. Be sure to hurl your hard-earned paycheck at me when it comes out.

So what the hell are you all up to? Seriously, why are all of you standing around my kitchen, drinking my ginger ale and eating my green onion cakes? That shit costs money!
Held in place by enormous steel couplers, the General Esteban Navarro dwarfed every explorer, medical transport, and freight slinger on the station docks. It was big enough, Ramon Galvez figured looking up at its nose from a port bar, that oncoming traffic could see it from a thousand miles away. He puffed on a cigarette and drank overpriced beer from one of those odd hourglass pints that were so popular in these places.

It was a hell of a ship, yessir. A little less than a kilometer long, though to be fair most of that length was made up by the strange matter drive. Bristling with laser cannons and rail guns and missile launchers and mine layers that weren't a hell of a lot of use unless you had somewhere real nice to hide. Ramon stubbed out his smoke in the ashtray, with more force than he intended.

The strange character who sat across the table noted Ramon's frustration. A tall, rugged human in his forties, the man had sat watching the Navarro's captain wordlessly and with obvious amusement. He was waiting for the right time to speak, waiting for Galvez to blurt something desperate and foolish. The man's name was Oswald, and unlike Ramon his sense of humor was palpable; it beamed from the small movements of his eyes when he cocked a brow or cracked a smile.

The two had met many times before. Sometimes it had been on friendly terms, other times they had been sworn enemies, always they had met to mediate a dispute or start a fresh one. Today, however, Ramon had come in with a problem and he couldn't be sure if it was Oswald's doing or something far more mysterious. If it wasn't the older man's fault, Galvez didn't know who else to blame.

"All right." Ramon said, exasperated, "Enough of the waiting game. Did you put the fucking cats in our storage bay?"

"Storage bay?"

"Most people would ask what I meant by cats."

"That ship of yours is an old warfighter from the days when Kal'selyn was a guest of the empire. It should have more than one storage bay."

"It has ten. One of them is full of cats."

"That sounds like the exact opposite of a problem to me."

"Did you do it? Did Kal'selyn order someone else to do it?"

"If I did, or she did, why would I tell you?"

"Obviously you want something. You must want something. Otherwise you've got a sick sense of humor."

"Again, I don't see why this is such a problem for you. My crew has some issues with cats--Jyscil over there is very allergic." Oswald nodded to one of the two goons he had brought along with him, a Mustellite with red eyes that seemed to glow from beneath her hood. "But since the human hystemic system is pretty much controlled by nanopills, I don't see how you couldn't just shut that sort of reaction off."

"Don't pretend you don't get the point. You dumped forty cats in one of my storage bays while we were moored at Iakammis. Why?"

"I didn't dump forty cats on you."

"What, they just spontaneously appeared?"

"Maybe. My ship's full of the cute little fuckers."

"What?"

"It's full of them. And the number fluctuates a lot. Any time we land we're bound to lose or gain a few. I don't know how they get there, I don't know how they feed themselves. I let them roam free. Free range kitties."

"Listen to me you son of a bitch--"

"Cats are a fact of the universe. There were cats on Ori Prime before the first human colonists arrived. Cats run around under the catwalks of hermetically-sealed colonies on Titan. Cats hitch rides from one end of the galaxy to the other, sometimes aboard ships where they shouldn't even be able to breathe.

"There are a few fundamental rules of the universe, Skipper Galvez. You can't get something from nothing. You can't hit absolute zero. Every ten-thousandth ship disappears into hyperspace and nobody knows why. And cats are everywhere."

Ramon didn't know how to come back from that one. He stared across the table at Oswald, the good-humored psychopath who had once, rumor has it, killed a crew that had risen up against Kal'selyn by kidnapping their children and demanding their suicide or else. Oswald, the man who mapped stars and explored distant planets when he didn't have any banks to rob, ships to pirate, or people to kill. Oswald, the man who had probably put forty fucking cats in Ramon's storage bay and said it was just physics, quit whining.

He didn't know how to come back from it. So he paid for their drinks, got up, and walked away. He had seventy-five crewmen, thirty mercenaries, and a bunch of adorable fluffballs to feed.
4242: Fundamental Laws
A little vignette related to 4242, a project I've been working on-and-off with Vaahlkult and Weissidian. Originally it was to be from a totally separate story, but I couldn't figure out what the hell to do with Galvez. So now he's the right-hand man to a rival of Kal'selyn, queen of trade over a large part of the galaxy. Anyway, it's a story universe that alternates between dark and extremely violent and...whatever you would call this.

Jyscil is Vaahlkult. Oswald Ferdinand-Rogbert and Ramon Galvez are mine.
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The streets all slick with rain reminded him of a hazy digital painting, the lights in their puddles formed with exaggerated, unpolished brush strokes. A half-dozen men and women in front of the bar, all lit up by the big white light hanging over the bouncer, formed the only distinct part of the scene. He wished he knew how to paint the things he saw.

Standing beneath a playground, he looked miserable and out of place. The loaded revolver in his right hand looked more like a child's toy in this setting. What a place for a skid bar like that, he thought, just across the street from an elementary school. Tomorrow if all went as planned the kids who played on these swings and platforms would be stuck behind yellow tape, their vacation place home to grisly murder.

Murder as committed by Jeff Kuhn, a man who played the part of a lost high school graduate far better than that of a hitman.

Nearly ten to two. The greasy biker son of a bitch would be coming out any minute, dragged drunkenly along to his fate by a girl he trusted. Time to get what he deserved, what everybody deserved in the so-called "underworld." An underworld of guys who skimmed from VLT machines, took protection payments from convenience stores and chop shops, and sold a lot of drugs. An underworld where the top hitmen were guys like Jeff, who took three grand in exchange for taking a life.

At first, he wasn't sure if the pair leaving the bar and crossing the parking lot really was Andre the Dead Man and Samara the Decoy. It wasn't until they had nearly reached the fence, fifty yards from where Jeff stood with his head bent to avoid hitting the crossbeams that he recognized both.

Samara had been the sort of innocent beauty only a diseased man would want to fuck rather than love. Had been until she met that diseased man, and started selling ecstasy with him in a trailer park. Had been until two miscarriages and a six-month stint in a women's correctional facility. Had been beautiful and sweet and fun-loving and--what the hell. She'd always been a royal bitch. Smart, a hell of a lot smarter than her boo, but unpleasant. It was two in the morning and Jeff's thoughts were getting muddled. He shook it off and waited for the pair to come to him.

"Kid, it's pissing rain out. Why don't you wanna head home with me?" Andre urged, tugged along at the wrist into the sandbox.

"Because this is more fun." She beamed. "Besides, I have a surprise for you."

"What kind of surprise?"

She sat up on a platform across from the one that partially concealed Jeff, connected to the rest of the playground by those little handles on tracks that kids swung from. She pulled up her skirt and let Andre get real close. Kissing her neck and clumsily removing his belt, then unzipping his pants, reaching in to grab hold of his cock.

Jeff stepped out, pistol held in front; Andre hadn't even noticed. Samara hadn't either, for that matter.

"C'mon, kid, what surprise are you talking about?"

"She meant 'surprise guest.'" Jeff's voice was low and just a little unsteady, a touch vibrato.

Andre had enough time to turn, genitals still halfway out of his underwear, and wheeze;

"No, wait!"

The first round went through the hand he threw up and into his face. He staggered and fell, catching another bullet in his chest as he went. Samara fled, screaming and playing the act of helpless bystander very well. Jeff stepped closer to the mutilated one percenter, half his cheek missing and still very much alive. He aimed straight for the bridge of Andre's nose, as lit in his mind's eye as a self-portrait.

One shot. Two. All the king's horses and all the king's men would never put Andre's skull together again. Jeff wiped the pistol and dropped it in the mire of wet sand. He turned and took off running, bolting across the school field, feeling very much like a boy who'd just smashed a window by accident and wanted to escape the blame.

We're all kids, he realized as he bounded along. We're all just dopey kids trying to play a game to which no adult understands the rules. He wished very much that he could paint this--that he could show the world his revelation.

But he was still Jeff Kuhn, the low-price hitman. More than that, now; he was an outlaw in the eyes of outlaws.
Two AM, At A Playground
A vignette from a larger story I would like to work on, if I figure out how to write it.
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Man I suck at this NaNoWriMo thing. Three days in and I've got nothing. A lot of really short, two-page stories or short stories with solid beginnings, but nothing I can fashion a good paperweight out of. By the time I figure something out that'll actually work I'll be playing half a month's worth of catchup in a day.

Read the last half of The Third Policeman by Flann O'Brien all in one go last Saturday night. Been a few months since I did that. It occurred to me that books are just old-school Netflix; you open it, lay down on the couch, and by the time you're done it's dawn and reality is a hazy mess you don't want to deal with. I missed getting that feeling from paper rather than TV. Anyway, I recommend the book. It gets a little tedious in a couple places but that is some damn fine postmodernist writing, on par with James Joyce.

They say you should act like a Roman when in Rome, but I disagree. I think you should act like a Vandal.

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You've been working on that all week, haven't you?
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